Hi everyone, I'm new around here and just written my first story attempt. I think this is the right place to post this, but please correct me if i'm wrong.
I tried to post a link to it here, but it looks like it's not allowed, so i've attached a copy of the story to this post.
It's pretty short, but I hope that I can build on it after hearing feedback and ideas for what people want to see!
Anyway, hope you like it!
Mod edit: thanks for the story! 
As you should be aware by now since it was announced in a pinned thread at the top of the General Forum http://forum.bearchive.com/index.php/topic,9982777.0.html the BEA can no longer permit HTML links to certain sites due to content there that violates our own rules. If you have any questions, please feel free to PM a mod. Thanks. -Palomine